There are many ways to propel a story forward. The physical action of the characters creates movement. Dialogue creates revelation…who are these people…let them tell you through their words and actions. And, descriptive narrative assists the forward motion of the story. Image detail engages the senses.
The Point of Inspiration (Part 2 of 3)
© by Christine O’Brien
She trolled her blue Volvo along the main road, pulling off at the various lookout points.
“That’s Thor’s Hammer,” she said pointing to a top-heavy stone protrusion.
“The thunder god,” he offered to show her that he had a degree of mythological literacy.
They continued on to Bryce Point and the delicate Wall of Windows. She took him down a trail or two, asking occasionally how he was doing. Did he need water or want to rest.
When the sun was near setting, she asked him where he was staying.
“Don’t know yet,” he answered truthfully.
There and then she said “I’m going to bake you a cake.”
They returned to her suite at the lodge.
“I work here from April through October,” she told him in explanation.
“As what, a tour guide?”
“No, I’m the head pastry chef. I actually have a staff that bakes the cakes. I decorate them according to the occasion and my inspiration. You might say that I take cake decorating to a new level. People come here to get married, celebrate an anniversary, birthday, all of those special human occasions. And a few odd ones like this older couple who ordered a cake to celebrate their newly acquired false teeth!”
He was definitely drawn to this brawny woman with a flair for cake decorating. He was surprised to hear himself ask, “Can I watch?”
He lingered at the lodge, sharing her room through spring and into summer. He told her he was on a medical leave from his job for a few months.
“What job,” she asked.
“Firefighter,” he said gruffly.
“A job with a lot of risk,” she said admirably.
By the end of July, she told him that their fling was sweet and that it was over.
“Time to move on,” she said.
To irk her, he added “to greener pastures.”
Do you know these characters a little better? Can you see how the story is being developed? Can you guess what the secret revelation is? Post what you think under comments!